Of my gmail "status" messages (little tags that tell gmail buddies what I'm busy doing), the one I find myself selecting most frequently is "reading4others." Included under this capacious status is work I do as a graduate advisor, as a colleague, or a favor (side note: I haven't forgotten about those of you I saw at RSA and whose stuff I promised to read--I'm getting there). Other status messages, such as "editing book reviews" or "reviewing" could well fall under reading4others if they did not have their own designations. Like a lot of mid- to advanced-career people, then, I read a lot of other people's prose. A typical afternoon for me includes some form of reading4others (I try mightily to reserve mornings for my own stuff). And in the course of all this reading4others, I have isolated some words and phrases that, let's just say, aren't my favorites. This doesn't mean that my own prose is free from these or its own very special tics. Let's just take the two that top my list of words most pieces could live without:
1. the way in which. This phrase is flat-out unnecessary. It's cumbersome, to boot. It often comes rolling in when someone is identifying the peculiar scope of an article/chapter/book, unfurling like a big plush red carpet or something. And like furling red carpet, it signifies that something big is coming. But words are not royalty or celebrities, and this phrase doesn't say anything that a simple "how" can't also say. Witness:
"This book examines the ways in which affect animates language."
vs.
"This book examines how affect animates language."
Several years ago I was riding a bus home from campus, and two undergraduates in front of me were mocking their instructor. One busted out an imitation that went something like "Let's not forget, class, the ways in which gender is constructed." Her friend laughed and laughed. And, I admit, so did I. It's true that academics come to rely on such phrases, especially orally. In fact, my secret suspicion is that "the ways in which" migrated from the oral to the written, beginning in the oral as something like filler. It's true that it's a lot better than "um." But still.
2. precisely. This one starts with a story. A few years ago, I shared a grant proposal with a sr. colleague whom I both feared and admired, a very well known, and brutally blunt, scholar who had by that point read more than her share of this sort of meta-writing, the reflective/projective writing about the writing that will happen or has happened or is happening. She preferred to insert her comments directly in the middle of my writing, marked by brackets and also by all caps. The effect was somewhat jarring, but it matched well with the kinds of things she had to say. I don't remember many of the specifics of her feedback, though I can assure you that I followed all of her suggestions and got good results. I do, however, remember what she typed after I used the word precisely, because it made me laugh and laugh. She wrote something like this: [WHEN SOMEONE USES THE WORD PRECISELY WHAT FOLLOWS TENDS TO BE ANYTHING BUT PRECISE.] Wow, I thought. She is so right. She was definitely right about that particular instance, but I suspected her take on all the other instances of the word precisely was not quite right. For the past four years, though, I have noticed the word "precisely" everywhere, and about 85% of the time it is in fact followed by a sweeping statement, a very confusing clause, or a demolition derby of concepts. My view on "precisely" then, is not that it's too bulky, but that it insists a bit too much. As with trash talk, if one is to use it, one had better be able to back it up.
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